Suggestions for Improvement: Take a look at our free AWA videos (m/module/gmat-analytical-writing-assessment) to get instructions on how to structure your essay and build paragraphs around evidence. You've got some practice to do before you reach a top score, so keep persevering with your sample responses.
Hello Rashm, I hope that these comments help as you prepare for the exam. Writing: I didn't see major writing errors, so keep up the good work on that front. Structure: The goal for your response should be a five paragraph essay, so you've got to do some work on adding length. Your goal should be to have three reasonable examples that you can write three body paragraphs about. Check out the free video links below for more information about structuring your essay.
I know that it's tough to write that much within a strict time limit, but you'll be able to get a little faster as you practice more. Make sure that you have a real intro paragraph: in this essay's intro, you started adding suggestions to strengthen the author's argument.
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